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  1. FadeLess Silver Belt

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    Perhaps inspired by the best songwriters thread i thought maybe it would be a cool idea to create this Poems&Lyrics thread where we can all share our thoughts and get creative.
    The rule is simple :

    - Come up with your own stuff. NO plagiarism is allowed, as it obviously ruins the point of original creation.

    Even tho i´ll start im hoping you guys come along and join the ride, so get creative ! :D



    Whispers


    The dying light was chasing
    Those voices in my head
    A mile away from faking
    From certain death i fled

    Saw you on a crossroad
    So i drove till i was there
    Caught between the limit
    Of life amongst the dead

    Come to me so bright
    Make me want to care
    The night is still so lonelly
    A light i can not bare

    A sun will soon arise
    The dark is still ahead
    Make me want to live
    Before i lose my glare



    I´ll take this chance to wish you guys an awesome New Year´s Eve and 2020 !! Cheers.
     
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  2. FadeLess Silver Belt

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    Bottle´s Neck


    These nights that i have been
    Daydreaming fuelled by sin
    Ive caught you by the skin
    And you had me from whitin

    Even though it hurt me
    I had it by my side
    And even though you loved it
    I still cant be your guide

    Lets take a trip to the outside
    And get a grip of our mind
    This road aint no friend of mine
    Cause i ain´t one of a kind

    Come join me in the abyss
    Would you settle for a kiss
    Oh yeah thats such a bliss
    And thats just something i miss
     
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  3. FadeLess Silver Belt

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    Salt&Pepper



    With the sound of crashing waves awaken by the sea
    Still floating from the night that resides with me
    A foggy filled road and no cup of tea
    I´ll grab you in a moment

    Beauty is in the eyes which dream to see


    Revisiting the past where was my last address
    Counting down the times when i felt i was at home
    A mirage in the desert it resembles i confess
    Exemption from a chance but ahead with some finesse

    Will i ever find a place to roam


    No more, no less, for sure its just a mess
    Fast forward, rewind, when did i lose my mind
    If i take it till the end
    Will that mean that its excess

    Or am i just possessed by a stranger within
     
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  4. KAZSoliloquy Yellow Card Yellow Card

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  5. FadeLess Silver Belt

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  6. Leonard Haid Minimalist Living the Illusory Dream

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    Ugh
    Veddy
    Aniha
    Smoladomateeeee
    Shma! Schma! Yodeemoh........
    Kalamata Pachalamata ahmat.
     
  7. FadeLess Silver Belt

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  8. FadeLess Silver Belt

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    Subtle Borders


    Can you feel the sound
    Do you hear the waves
    Remember we´re the slaves
    But is it serving our bound

    No more empty plates
    They say we´re just primates
    Prisoners of the crown
    We´re the aliens on the ground

    No place without wisdom
    Resisting to be found
    Are we in a kingdom
    Or in a circus of frowns

    The matter it is infinite
    No measure and no bounds
    We´re no casual incident
    We´re just stuck in our fairgrounds
     
  9. FadeLess Silver Belt

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    Tunnel Vision



    Into the warm embrace
    Of the calm before the storm
    Something to displace
    Sense of fear i must transform

    The festivities have to end
    Cause the party is yet to come
    What you cherish you defend
    What destroys you you resist from

    Escape from the asylum
    And make your way to home
    No place is a misfit
    If you follow your own dome

    The gathering is upon us
    Like the cold that meets the sun
    There´s no need to make a fuss
    Cause the start has just begun
     
  10. Chesten_Hesten Sling'n Lead & Slapp'n Pussies, Ya Dig?

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  11. Chesten_Hesten Sling'n Lead & Slapp'n Pussies, Ya Dig?

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  12. FadeLess Silver Belt

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    @Chesten_Hesten i appreciate the contribuition and im all for good lyrics, but did you read the 1st post ? Or are you saying that my stuff is crap ? :D
     
  13. Chesten_Hesten Sling'n Lead & Slapp'n Pussies, Ya Dig?

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    Read?

    I can't, didn't.

    what?
     
  14. Rimbaud82 Black Belt

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    Nice idea, I have wrote a poem or two in my time. Nothing amazing, but I love poetry.
     
  15. FadeLess Silver Belt

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    Thank you Sir. Feel free to share ;)
     
  16. Satanical Eve Cro Cop's Left Leg Platinum Member

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    I wrote this a long time ago when I was around 17 and deals with my childhood sexual abuse

    I was only 13
    Laying there in my bed
    It was a sunny day
    Another day
    Just like any other day
    Or was it just like any other day
    He came walking into the room
    Silently closing the door
    Looking at me
    Smiling ever so brightly
    A turn of the lock
    Walking over
    Sitting down
    Putting his hand down my pants
    Tears drop down my face like rain
    He whispers into my ear
    "Don't Cry, this won't hurt a bit"
     
  17. FadeLess Silver Belt

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    shit bro, im sorry. I appreciate you contribuiting and sharing your own stuff, i just didnt want to make you remember things im sure you want to forget.
    I hope you´re doing well.
     
  18. FadeLess Silver Belt

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    The Dancing Clone



    In your hands dealt a king without a queen
    A chip and a chair is how you´re supposed to feel
    Tap into the place where the grass is allways green
    The frequency tells a future you must deal

    The past is the last, the last is the past
    Be sure to have a blast
    The present it is here
    So live it without fear

    Go back to the place when it felt that it was near
    If you come in last you have to check your rear
    Think it straight and get your ass in gear
    Guided by the stars in a night that is so clear

    Move on on your own
    Drive your feet dont grab a tow
    Even if against the flow
    Grown on to your golden throne
     
  19. Rimbaud82 Black Belt

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    Your metre is all over the place, if I was to give just a little bit of feedback. I think you either need to try and stick to a regular metre, or else write more freely...mixing between different metres makes it read a bit off in my opinion. For me, in terms of reading poetry (and attempting to write it) the metre and the flow of the lines is much more important than the need for end rhymes. End rhymes are overrated, and when people stick to them at the expense of everything else it tends to give the poem a nursery rhyme feel. Not having a go, or insulting you, just my own thoughts.
     
  20. FadeLess Silver Belt

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    Its ok, no need to apologize, i appreciate the feedback.;)
    Yeah, i know my metre is a bit unsteady, specially in "dancing clone". I think its because i hear the music in my head and i try to fit the lyrics with the flow of the sound.
    I dont necessarily agree that rhymes are overrated, but i totally agree that one mustn´t force a rhyme at the expense of a coherent thought or idea from which the poem is based on.
    That makes the challenge fun. :)
     

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